- #1
Rather than take the time to digest things in the originals memories she first wants to test out magic. Let's not start with something small. No let's use teleportation magic! And then admit that teleporting without a destination in mind might result in transporting inside a solid matter and dying. Let's not do that again.. or not! Let's next teleport into some forest with only the help of a map and no observation of the vicinity! Why is it that almost no webnovels have heard of divination spells? Well, I get that it's rarely used in video games so there's that.
Next let's use explosion magic at point blank range when the MC inevitably gets attacked at her destination. An especially good idea since it's a magic she hardly ever used before. Putting aside the time dilation often used in fictional battles (having an internal monologue while being attacked), wouldn't your first impulse be to use something you're familiar with as a knee jerk reaction? This MC is supposedly a gamer, but I don't think the author is (par for the course imo). If you've played any number of rpg's with a lot of combat, you tend to develop certain rotations or priorities when it comes to attacks. So she blows up the forest and somehow escapes mutual destruction by having the presence of mind to cast flight magic... wait. There was no sign that this monster had long ranged attacks. Why was it easier to fly while blowing up her face compared to escaping in the first place?
If you're going for the rule of cool the author should have used the 'cool guys don't look at explosions' trope. Here we only have a vague sense that the MC *might* be rather sturdy, but we're not sure because it's not clear how much of a hit she took.
[collapse]To be fair this has more to do with plot holes and questionable writing than a characterization issue. In a way it's nice to see one of these transported characters be flustered or make hasty decisions that doesn't involve overused tropes. Misunderstandings, exposition pez dispensers, expulsion from family/party/engagement/country/world/reality, etcSpoilerIt's easy to become numb to reading about transported Japanese people having a ritual of bathing. Not really a prob just over explained. Here we skip that for a legitimate need for a bath - the MC randomly rolls her face/body in her food at dinner. Happens all the time when you get high, right? Anyways the author decides to further distance things from the norm by not hand waving hot baths away with magic/tools. Instead the servants have to do it the most back breaking and s*upid way possible. It takes 6 hours to boil a bath of water? They're brute forcing the wrong part here. It would make more sense for a wealthy noble to spare no expense by constantly boiling water in advance to have it ready any time it's needed. Why would they wait 6 hours for them to do it from square one? I mean they don't even have the wood chopped to the right size? At least give me a bucket of hot water and washcloth so I don't have to sit around with dried blood/food on body.
[collapse]This is just in the first 11 chapters. I feel like the author is trying to be clever by slightly subverting tropes, but the execution thus far is not great. That said it isn't that it's a bad story, just dragged down by these details. If you turn your brain off or don't mind the details than it probably won't hamper you at all. Generally good translation. There are some slightly confusing parts but it's hard to know if that's in the original or something lost in the conversion.SpoilerUltimately we learn that vampires don't walk around in broad daylight in this country, but paradoxically the guards are fine with people they assume are just dressed like them? We're told a vampire gets through the checkpoint ahead of her, and later on there's something vague about only specific vampires have permission? They refer to some character that's not even introduced??
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