- #1
"Show, don't tell" is a very good advice for any writers, and this webnovel certainly shows what happen when you're so eager to tell you didn't put much efforts in showing.The novel mostly try to tell the reader how to feel about things that's happenning, but barely setup any context and/or backstories about them - excecpt immediately before or after the story is going to talk about them (sometimes). So the reader won't even know they should even consider those elements into the character's thoughts and actions, making the whole thing feels like the author just make things up as they go along (which is quite likely for webnovels). At the newest chapters I read (v2c7) I still don't know how the world is, such as : which time period/tech level this world is at, how does the shrine and this patheon works, or how exactly the "Kami-sama" looks like other than dirty and stinky (I assume he looks like a slime, but even his size is still uncertain).That said, there does seems to be some improvements in later chapters, and some parts do felt competently written, so I guess it'll get better as the story progress.