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this start of great as a premise, but failed in the execution part. the writer wants an aloof happy go lucky character, but it turns out bitter and a bit not sane.what the MC did is not how an MC of a happy go lucky act, its a bitter one. thats fine, like the character monologue might be saying they're fine, but then the reader realized they are not. the author did put a bit of those premise in, but then when its time that a bitter character should act, the author pushed "i am highly aloof" agenda onto the MC again, and its like seeing a bipolar honestly.there's no wisdom of an old age youd expected from the MC, nor the emotional maturity, which while it could be played on as a body's age thing, but the MC should be aware of that if she lived like... her entire mortal life, twice even, honestly I think they just don't know how to write a convincing old age character.