- #1
At this stage, despite the plot and pacing being unusually coherent and well thought out, the story suffers from terribly bland writing.The FL Irene is by design an insecure and reticent person, and the ML Micheal is almost never present, and when he is he interacts very little with Irene. Since the novel is written entirely from her perspective, by extension the reader has no familiarity to the character.Quite frankly, it's impossible to build any attachment. The most vivid character so far is the childhood friend cannon fodder.In conclusion, good idea with bad execution. Hopefully something improves in the following chapters.