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A typical wish fulfillment fanfic. It incorporates chiness otaku fan theories and fanon which makes the story confusing as no explanation was done to make people know that the facts were fanon or not, example: Konoha colors, which is literally a fanon group made by chunese fans consisting of; White = kakashis dad, Yellow = Minato, Blue = guy, idk = Kurenais dad and the rest I dunno. Anyway a lot of misleading and confusing information is made, he even used alternate universe to change the plot even before his existence came to the world. Although this was explained it was done so late and it was almost like the author realized later on that he made a mistake but did not care or was to lazy to fix his mistake and simply went on with writing.Now one of the more annoying things, having a harem wish fulfillment story is not bad, add s*x, scuff anything, I don't care, but at least give it some sense of order. The author failed in basic character development. At the point of 50 chapters in you could already see a pattern. As long as the author names a female character, she is bound to become the MC's woman. There's no question of close friend, confidant, failed love, because the writing was done is such a way that you immediately know that the woman will be part of the harem. It has gone beyond the problem of chinese harem MC's as the storytelling revolves aroubd the simple rule of, "if the author took time to write a name she's part of the harem". The MC does not need to meet or interact with a woman to have her be part of the harem, if a womans name is used more than twice in one chapter she's most probably going to f*ck the MC, thats how the story goes. This oart is long because at the later parts of the story the author, being a lazy as shit, once again did the lazy writing style of, infodumping why woman A loves MC, basically, "I just want to make MC f*ck her so heres some random BS to explain why". So yeah, lazy writing coupled with mixed facts and willful plot development leads to this tr*sh.Did I forget to mention that the author has some kind of vendetta against sasuke and naruto? He wrote himself (MC) as an understanding and kind individual, a mature person with some trauma, but the dude acts mature at some points and utterly childish on others. Moreover, his hate for the characters leads him to forget that his Mc's actions should have led to a lot of character development. He looks to be wanting to critique the character development of Naruto characters but his own writing and character development is worse than a cardboard cutout, he literally copy and pasted his own character from chinese novels and did the same for most characters in naruto completely removing their original personality.Personally I myself write fanfics, but even when writing wish fulfillment I try to make the characters as close to the original as I can. Then any actions done by the MC is what will change said characters. Why do that? Cuz a fan makes a fanfic because he's a fan. I won't be suprised if the author tried to make money out of his fanfic. After all if it was drawn in a doujinshi it would probably sell if he removed all the useless fight scenes and training scenes and simply amplified the s*x scenes.TLDR: worst wish fulfillment fan fic I've ever read