- #1
The premise and world building is nice so far, but everything moves very fast. I might not like slow-burn stories, but this one is a flash fire.The author does more telling then showing, like during a tiny conflict between MC and ML it goes from the ML in the middle of threatening MC to suddenly saying Spoiler
"In the end, Bai Meng managed to survive the terrifying ordeal because Mo Hankui’s wound reopened, causing him to faint on the spot."
[collapse]It broke me out of the little Emerson I had in the story because why start a scene with a little anticipation at the interaction only to end it with a single sentence summary.