After Transformation, Mine and Her Wild Fantasy Chapter 68 Discussion

This is a overall mediocre story. The description and the thought of the storyline is a wonderful idea but it is not progressing correctly.

The story loses sight right away. This is supposed to be a story about a guy (Single Conscience), who inherently discovers that another body is strapped to his conscience. ~Skipping Spoilers~ After he wakes up on his female side she immediately develops a conscience of her own. Even though there is only the guy controlling both bodies the story is ruined because it acts upon separately. ~Now Queue the Spoilers~ Spoiler

If I was a guy, who had a female side who was abducted due to some crackheads wandering through the forest boppin' field mice on the head, I would want to f*cking kill the people doing so and make them completely embarrassed and resent themselves for assuming a situation. Later on we're only getting single views of each side of the story, almost like two completely different stories occurring in one light novel, creating hard to follow timelines. The writer loses sight of the fact that it is one conscience, so being able to telepathically think of ways to get out of a situation stops. Further in the novels the male got a s*ave to enter the magic tournament to rescue his other half but it seems like the other half doesn't want to be rescued, (Which f*cking outright confuses me because there's only one person, unless this character has multiple split personality disorder.) If you were hanging on the edge of the cliff and begging for dear life you wouldn't go, 'Oh, I don't want to go back to my old life.' and f*cking let go. If you buy a 2x chocolate bar you're not going to take the other half and chuck it out your apartment window, you're still going to eat that sh*t and feel guilty about it later.

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I'm just venting all of my anger and hatred into this novel. It loses sight of itself, it lost it's mojo.

The description says 1 person is controlling both bodies, so it should remain like that. They should change the description to, (Read this with one of those old action movie trailer voices) "Two adventurers, two naturally born geniuses fight their way to make ends meet and discover each other upon this peculiar and bizarre journey. Coming This Fall!"

The story was good for like the first two chapters and I lost interest for 66 chapters. I continued reading because I thought it would get better but it didn't.

Anywho, if you're looking for a reincarnation op character light novel with either a female or male MC, this is the light novel for you. If you're looking for light novel were the MC has multiple bodies, this is not the light novel for you.

1 star for description: Check

0 stars for staying on topic to description: Check

2 stars for being a 'Meh' sotry: Check

If I'm being honest, this is a garbage as story that deserves 1 star, it doesn't even follow it's own plot anymore so how do you call it a story, it's like the chapter up until the abduction was the main story and the rest is just all OP's.

I rated 3 stars because I'll continue reading it. That's if they update it.