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Updating after reading to Chapter 167:The translation quality has improved a great deal since my initial review and is now very much readable.There are still grammatical errors, but they're mostly sentence structure errors that result in stilted, awkward prose. The text is still clearly understandable despite the occasional poorly structured sentence. The less common errors that make the text difficult to understand seem to mostly be dialogue related, specifically in translating Miyagi's curt way of speaking. But you still get the feeling of what's being said even if the actual words sometimes don't make sense. The story itself just continues to get better. A fantastic slow burn romance that continues to turn up the heat enough to keep you hanging on every chapter. I was so hooked by it that I bought up all the yet to be released chapters. Previously written after reading to Chapter 58:Himi-cat's review sums up my thoughts on this work, just more gentle than I'd be when criticizing certain aspects:- Translation quality is not "pretty iffy - machine translation with limited editing". It's machine translation with next to no editing/or no editing by a native English speaker.I also considered offering my services as an editor because a native English speaker could quickly and effortlessly correct numerous grammar mistakes while reading each chapter. Most egregious are male pronouns showing up... in a YURI work where 99% of pronouns are female. But despite the poor translation, it's still readable (assuming you're editing in your head while reading) and the emotions and thoughts of the characters still come through.- The story itself, as Himi-cat said, is a near 100% character driven yuri story between the two main characters, with very little in terms of plot or characters outside of these two characters.It is a very slow burn yuri romance but works well because the characters are introspective on their escalating feelings and acts of intimacy. Their thoughts show they subconsciously want to get closer but fear the pain from separation after getting too close. The hesitation to escalate their relationship is believable and the underlying emotions that push them to get closer despite this hesitancy makes every small interaction interesting.