- #1
Interesting premise and overall decent potential. It is pretty realistic. Sadly, the author goes on constant hyper-specific derailments of aspects mentioned in passing that do not need an entire chapter to be explained. This makes the reading experience unbearable and exhaustive, quickly killing any interest I had in the story. Not to mention that the author feels the need to explain the background of everything related to anything that might be unfamiliar to the reader.Example:Spoiler
In Chapter 12, he begins to explain why traditionally cooked cuisine, the ingredients, and his ability to cook it is expensive as well as the state that led to this. It lasts for ~2/3rd of the chapter and even spills into the next chapter! Nothing needs this much explaining and info dumping. Undoubtedly, this story has the worst case of infodumping somewhat useless and boring information out of nowhere that I have seen.
The author also has various flaws in his logic with the world building such as soda being cheaper than water. It was one thing that actually needed a line or two of explanation (but didn't get) and felt like it was added for the sake of exemplifying the dystopian nature of a megacorp controlled city.
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