- #1
Fairly bad...First, the translation quality is not the best, nor is it very good, it's kinda floating between "Okay" and "Machines-can-do-it-better" territory. It feels like the syntax is just a bit off in most sentences and the use of first-person perspective in storytelling always throws off the immersion. (Something I always tell writers, a story is set in stone as far as a reader is concerned. When they get to it, it's already happened. Usually FPP is used as a narrative device to further explain certain events from a different point of view that needed a closer look, but when it's used as the main writing device it becomes a hindrance to the reader since all information only comes from the point of view given instead of all that could possibly be seen to help a reader understand what is going on. Constant shifts between third-person and first-person perspective are just jarring, ruining immersion.) The story itself, while an interesting cliche, is executed so poorly and randomly that it leaves you wondering why something was done. Honestly, half of the actions that the MC takes just leave me scratching my head and trying to figure out if there was supposed to be some deeper meaning.So, overall, this story is a huge mess. It could have been good but the writing and poor translation just don't do the cliche any justice.
