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If you want to know how to mess up a good story with good premise, this is the example. Really. While the beginning is not good enough to be called masterpiece, I have good laugh and truly enjoy it. I also didn't expect it to be really good either, my expectation is near zero. It's low. And precisely because I read it without functional brain, I could genuinely enjoy it. But god damn mother in christ. I know the explanation is deus ex machina at best, aka just made some sh*t and let it happen. But that's not the reason why I eventually lost interest in this novel. It's the motherfokin MC man. Like, can you not FOR ONE SECOND, immediatly thinking le*d WHENEVER a FEMALE comes into existence?? I can tolerate it then but oh my god.Spoiler
This guy IMMEDIATLY thinking on how to f*ck this pink girl, the very second he see her like, HOLD YOUR f*ckING HORSES MAN.
[collapse]That's not the only reason. Trust me when I said the MC is not relatable and frustating to read. Like in one scene we see how intellegent he is, which stems from different mindset, yada yada. How he determined to 'protect' himself and his family and all that bravery an MC typically have. For him to be petrified when facing a crisis. Instantly turn into coward who cannot think, or mindless ape which succumb to his lust. Like, dawg, do you have a bipolar or something? It's so inconsistent which led to frustating feeling of 'what the f*ck are you doing, dumbass?'.All in all, I truly wish for this to not degenerate further. The premise is good, and honestly, the only thing that keeps me going is that very premise. I won't talk about illogical occurence and cause in this novel because, like a said, I have a good laugh because of it. But lord, please, stop giving the MC new f*cktoy. And have some personality dawg. Yer not a fokin mental patient, aren't cha?
