- #1
The premise is really nice, a zombie girl who needs yang energy to feel alive slice of life, written for a young adult audience, and the skits alternate smoothly between slight horror, entertainment faceslapping, romance, thriller...The problems are in the writing of two things:
- The ML, he's supposed to be "sweet" but the author could not help making him a controlling jerk who goes against what the heroine asks him explicitly unless she threatens (and even then...) he does not trust her, he stalks her (literally bugging her phone tracking, among other stuff), and he tries his best to isolate her at home, and even prevent her to have simple professional contact with any other guy. Spoiler
I would have liked if the heroine truly had no emotions and just kept him to leech, but obviously it's not what's written, it just make the guy loveable as far as the author is concerned
[collapse] - The life experience of the MC. She's supposed to have experienced a lot, know a lot, have met a lot of people, have seen them grow old and die, have left them before they noticed she's a zombie, but no, she's written like an eighteen year old who left her hometown and got her first boyfriend and part time job, I guess it's supposed to make her relatable, whereas per the premise she should have been a calculating cold entity with a huge social network and an utilitarian approach, and the ML crush should have been correctly depicted as a passing childish infatuation on his part, she should have seen through right away, and actually not cared about.
