The rise of the Broken Princesses

Writing Quality: It... isn't good. While the basic grammar (the word-by-word grammar) is fine, trying to keep in mind when [MC] or [other characters] are talking is a genuinely tough task, due to the lack of dialogue marks (the "[words of dialogue]"). And often, even reading is hard, due to a severe lack of commas... Because of that, I found myself skimming over the paragraphs. Author, feel free to refer to some comments I left on the chapters. I can give a bit of an extra explaination, if needed.Story Development: Too early to judge. I did like the concept, though.Character Design: It's... I don't know how to feel about it? We're presented to [MC], an everyday man who had his dreams crushed by society's cruel rules... Only for him to react calmly to all of the events taking place in the Library, with the ones that stood out to me being the tentacles, and the bloodline recreation. In the former, [MC] had some panic, but almost forgot about everything right after?? With something similar happening with the bloodline recreation. Both the [MC] and his "best friend" had a similar reaction to that one, with them even being able to joke and flirt casually around *after* having gone through a potentially life-and-death experience. A horribly painful one, at that.I was going to rate this 3/5 because of William and the former Librarian Keeper (Both of which generated some interest for me), but I decided against it. Update Stability: By WN's standards (consistent 7-14 chapters per werk), this is low. You're barely starting, though, so I'd say this is one of the easier things to fix.World Background: Up to chapter 7-8, there's little information. A few names were dropped in the dialogue, but nothing explained in depth yet. Only reason why I'm giving it 3/5 is because the Library itself is interesting.So, yeah. I don't have much else to say here  as I've already said everything in the previous paragraphs... Wait, nevermind, I do.Consider changing some of the tags, as certain things might be seen as deal-breakers for many. (An example possibly being the lack of an LGTB tag. This one is a genuine piece of advice, so you can avoid waking up to a bunch of insults and threats over having a kiss between two best friends.)... That's about it. Have a good day/night, readers/author!

I just read the description and honestly it looks awsesome but the only thing that sucls is that the MC is and stays a F-rank even though he has a SSS-rank skill that allows him to fuse things together but honestly it would be cool if the MC can either work his way up from F-rank or finds something that allows him to raise his rank or taks some kind of fruit or something that is supposed to strengthen ur rank or whatever but have him find a lot of them and I mean A LOT and have him eat them all at one time have him raise his rank that way but have it almost kill him and give hi incredible pain or something.... and at the same time have it come from a tree or something that can be taken an replanted somewhere where he can keep it safe and then have him get other special things that will help him and the things he fuses together and have the special things he gets and brings back to the place where he can keep them safe have them grow and/or become more powerful when they get used so how ever he grows them or raises them its special and then they become special... hope this helps with ideas!!!

The story is aptly named and the name speaks for itself.

i won't comment on quality for now, but the synopsis, idea of the book, the merger of two extreme opposites in story is very interesting. keep it up mr.author.

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It was my mother. Hearing her voice made me come to my senses. I didn't realize that I had stopped breathing until I sucked in a deep breath and sighed of releaf. I ran all the way across the yard, feeling as if something was trying to pull me back to the forest, making me run as hard as I could until I reached the back door. I stood there, crouched over as I tried to regain my breath, my heart thudding loudly in my ears. My head craned up, and my eyes locked on the deep dark forest in front of me, making my heart skip a beat and an unsettling feeling rush through me.

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