One Punch Man : Valir's Chronicle

The author's storytelling ability is unparalleled; I was completely immersed. Can't wait to read more 🤩

ainda não li mas por ser fanfic hxh merece 5 estrelas c

The novel great, but to me it seems like a copy of another novel that has been dropped, but I couldn't find it it just remember paying for the chapters

The book is one that actually has a good storyline, but I feel there is still room for improvement.The book pacing right from the first chapter is too fast and not much time has been allocated to really explain the book which can be negative. It is a good one, just make sure to adjust it so for it to be much more better.

So, this is definitely AI gen work. I am not just making things up here, I have attached proof. This isn't even the most advanced AI detector. You can literally use anyone on the internet to check how bad this is.Now onto the next part:The MCs character is annoying, he has a very shallow character. But I can ignore that as a blank slate for reader to self insert themselves like most Japanese protagonists. But even then I cannot ignore the story progression. Gandhari making decisions for him in front of Indira, while saying she'll save him.  The annoying fact that Krishna already knew about his reincarnation but if that was not enough, he added oil to the fire by telling him more about himself, the system too. Just makes you wonder where this is going. He is going for Pandava friendship, while the Pandavas don't even want him. The only good thing I found in the 20+ chapters is the bow battle against Arjun, and that's it.Also, I'll mention something else which is very annoying. A lot of chapters are told from another view all over again. This is clearly a way to increase chapter count. Don't get me wrong, multiple POVs are a good thing, but what the author is doing instead is telling you a summary of first two chapters in the new 3rd chapter. This seems an honestly bad writing decision at best and a really evil ploy to scam us for more money while giving 2/3 of the content at worst. I'll give the author the benefit of the doubt and hope it's the former.Tbf neither the story decisions nor the characters are likeable. All the people you are supposed to like, you'll dislike and all the ones you are supposed to dislike, you will dislike too :). Basically nothing to root for in the story. I have read till 40+ chaps for now. Just one above the free version, I might sound critical, but this is a paid novel. I will be paying for it, so it has to be worth the money, and with the glaring issues I doubt it is that.All that being said. These are just the issues I had, so, I thought I'll point them out. However, I do know that writing is hard, and I wish you all the best in your future endeavors. Just be positive and try not to use AI, it strips the soul off your work, and you'll not really improve either.Good Luck Man.

Your brain gets smart but your head gets dumb

           That was all there was to be seen at the place   green everywhere. Those were the sights that the students of  the school.

Leo: "Was easier than expected."