World Without Crowns

Review at 16 chapters.  The first couple chapters of setup were fine.  The writing quality is not good, the dialogue is written in constant circles listing the same activity as if trying to fill out word count.  Stuff like “I have to steal her for this money” followed by “I started stealing her first so I could get money.  Chapters 3-16 all include the repetitions with no contribution to the story.  I would not recommend in this current state.  It’s possible it gets better later, but based on the first 16 chapters, I don’t recommend reading in the current state, even if the synopsis seems good

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