This story has a lot of promise. The details exploring cultivation and the setting and society are really vibrant. There is an attention to details that brings it to life and shows great promise as the story starts to unfold. There is also a joy in the storytelling that comes through expressing just how much fun becoming a cultivator would be.The current posting pace is really high, almost every day we get a new post and some days we get more than one. I do love receiving chapters frequently, but this probably needs to be slowed down to address the following issues:The big downside to this story right now is the grammar and formatting. There needs to be a lot more polish put on this before posting. The inconsistent capitalization in the story title is a good indicator of the kind of issues we have: it jumps between 1st person and 3rd person POVs, goes back and forth between present and past tense, there are extra spaces and punctuation typos. Occasionally a sentence just ends suddenly and is never finished. Or a sentence seems more like a bullet from the story outline, that was supposed to get more framing thoughts, or more transition between the neighboring paragraphs but it never got it, so we are left just interpreting sudden ideas and figuring out what just happened.I do think there is a good story in here though, once some editing puts some polish on it.
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