One of the strongest points as well as its weakness for me was the attention to detail. I could imagine everything the author was describing perfectly, but at times it became a bit much. We have what feels like the character's entire backstory first thing in the first chapter and it felt a bit cumbersome. BUT! It was all written beautifully.
My only advice would be to do more showing and less telling. Other than that I think you have a promising story on your hands :)
I think this story is something that many would enjoy. Action packed with loads of information right off the bat. Me personally i prefer the show don't tell standard and having mystery and things revealed over time. I think if you don't and simply want a straight forward narrative this is definitely the story.
To me the weakest part is the combat scenes sometimes the timing is slightly off, this is typically due to the wording sometimes being past tense then referring to actions that should have already happened ex. saying a character dashed forward with an attack, then in the next line saying he grabbed his sword and dashed forward, that time of thing.
All in all I could see many people enjoying this novel, so keep it up author.
Excellent story, the begin was very stylish and interesting, lots of info dump which the author must reduce but rest all was good. Action packed and thrilling which I liked.
A system book why you level up as you battle obstacles.
Story development isn't forced and how it started really drew me in. This is actually my first system book and I'm enjoying it. I read all chapters and will be waiting for more.
I must add that the structure of the world background helps you to imagine it as you read.
Author did a great job and I will be waiting to read more.
Major and constant grammatical errors that could've been fixed with a free app like Grammarly. This is coupled with a main character whose backstory is filled with nonsense filler accomplishments. Overall I could see this having potential but for now, this is not worth the time.
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One of the strongest points as well as its weakness for me was the attention to detail. I could imagine everything the author was describing perfectly, but at times it became a bit much. We have what feels like the character's entire backstory first thing in the first chapter and it felt a bit cumbersome. BUT! It was all written beautifully.
My only advice would be to do more showing and less telling. Other than that I think you have a promising story on your hands :)
To me the weakest part is the combat scenes sometimes the timing is slightly off, this is typically due to the wording sometimes being past tense then referring to actions that should have already happened ex. saying a character dashed forward with an attack, then in the next line saying he grabbed his sword and dashed forward, that time of thing.
All in all I could see many people enjoying this novel, so keep it up author.
Hope the author continues his work...
Story development isn't forced and how it started really drew me in. This is actually my first system book and I'm enjoying it. I read all chapters and will be waiting for more.
I must add that the structure of the world background helps you to imagine it as you read.
Author did a great job and I will be waiting to read more.
Keep up the good work