I want to like the story, but the grammar is just hard to stomach after 10 or 15 chapters... please find a beta or proofreader... This story has so much potential, but the bad English is ruining the enjoyment of the story.
Hello, everyone, I am the author of The supreme sovereign system, phamtonbullet, I just wanted to say a few things , believe me I am doing this just to express my opinion and not to shamelessly add reviews to the novel :v , so here we go:
1) I know that my nick name is writing wrong, it should be phantombullet but It was already taken, uwu.
2) I always read your comments my beloved readers, every time that you post a commend in any chapter, I read it. I know a few of you who always thanks me for the chapter, I really, really appreciate it.
3) As you may already notice, I have problems with the grammar , I am really sorry about that, I always feel bad about this, I am planning to take a few days to edit all my past chapters (1-25). I am using a few grammars correctos, and I am trying to find someone to be my proofreader(this was a suggestion from you) , in conclusion , I will do my best to give all of you a writing quality that you deserved.
3) As I was saying, I always read your commends, I know a lot of people have been complaining about the fact that I called Artemis, Artemisa. Well, the thing is this, I have ALWAYS called her by that name xD . I planned to leave it that way, however, to give you a better time in reading the novel, I changed to Artemis in chapter 30 and it will stay that way from now on.
4) This novel will be a long one, The adventures of Alfonso are just beginning, some of you have asked if Alfonso will get superpower and fight by himself, well, I won't spoil you, so I won't answer, I will only say that Alfonso would have to use his head more than his muscles...(he is crippled anyway, :v)
5) I will now(02/07/2018) put a bonus chapter system, however , to have them, I will have to shamelessly ask for your votes(spirit stones) , this bonus chapters will be given depending on what position we ended on the week:
- Ranked between 90-80 : 1 bonus chapter
- Ranked between 70-60 : 2 bonus chapters
- Ranked between 50-40 : 3 bonus chapters
I will stop there, lets be honest, we have a long way to get to further positions, when this novel consolidates itself better , I will do another system of bonus chapters.
6) I usually post 1 chapter per day.
7) Finally, I want to thank you all of you who follow the adventures of Alfonso, please keep looking forward for it! And for the ones who are just reading reviews, what are you waiting for?
bro, you have a good story. its nice to see a new novelist rise up to shine, i will try to support you by reading and appreciate your works
the grammar was horrible at early but its getting better and better later on, it's show how hard you work. we are really thankful for that.
but you see, the problem is every new reader always start from beginning, and it will really help yourself if you revise you early work. I'm sure it will encourage many new reader.
i thank you for your time and effort, i wish you goodluck
It had such a good storyline but the author's English level is not very high. There is so many grammar and spelling mistakes it ruins the story. Also the plot is not consistent and the author forgot to search about greek gods. It's a mess. I don't recommend this to anyone. I got headache correcting all the mistakes mentally while reading.
This is the third or forth time I've tried to get into this story, but again the bad grammar and characters etc. have kept me from getting past the first few chapters.
This is a shame because there seem to be some interesting ideas that I'd love to read about.
9 months ago as of writing this review the Author said that they were going to proofread/edit the start of the novel. Either this hasnt happened or they havent quite done a good enough job.
Overall, a story with interesting ideas, but poor execution lets it down especially when compared to a few of the other system novels.
For those looking for a good historical fiction which a modern man tries to use his wits to gain an advantage in a fantasy scenario, this isn't it
This novel is disappointing because they give the MC the perfect weapon to tackle the next mission (so if there was a fire demon they would give him a water mage just to be able to counter it perfectly)
The MC's knowledge is barely relevant as the system gives him textbooks on what to do (agriculture etc) Lazy writing and poor plot
The MC is the slave of the system and the gods. Why would anyone help someone else to become strong to rule them. That's just plain stupid. Why would anyone want to live like that. He just should had killed himself at least should've free from this bull****.
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1) I know that my nick name is writing wrong, it should be phantombullet but It was already taken, uwu.
2) I always read your comments my beloved readers, every time that you post a commend in any chapter, I read it. I know a few of you who always thanks me for the chapter, I really, really appreciate it.
3) As you may already notice, I have problems with the grammar , I am really sorry about that, I always feel bad about this, I am planning to take a few days to edit all my past chapters (1-25). I am using a few grammars correctos, and I am trying to find someone to be my proofreader(this was a suggestion from you) , in conclusion , I will do my best to give all of you a writing quality that you deserved.
3) As I was saying, I always read your commends, I know a lot of people have been complaining about the fact that I called Artemis, Artemisa. Well, the thing is this, I have ALWAYS called her by that name xD . I planned to leave it that way, however, to give you a better time in reading the novel, I changed to Artemis in chapter 30 and it will stay that way from now on.
4) This novel will be a long one, The adventures of Alfonso are just beginning, some of you have asked if Alfonso will get superpower and fight by himself, well, I won't spoil you, so I won't answer, I will only say that Alfonso would have to use his head more than his muscles...(he is crippled anyway, :v)
5) I will now(02/07/2018) put a bonus chapter system, however , to have them, I will have to shamelessly ask for your votes(spirit stones) , this bonus chapters will be given depending on what position we ended on the week:
- Ranked between 90-80 : 1 bonus chapter
- Ranked between 70-60 : 2 bonus chapters
- Ranked between 50-40 : 3 bonus chapters
I will stop there, lets be honest, we have a long way to get to further positions, when this novel consolidates itself better , I will do another system of bonus chapters.
6) I usually post 1 chapter per day.
7) Finally, I want to thank you all of you who follow the adventures of Alfonso, please keep looking forward for it! And for the ones who are just reading reviews, what are you waiting for?
Alfonso Lockheart command you! Read it!
the grammar was horrible at early but its getting better and better later on, it's show how hard you work. we are really thankful for that.
but you see, the problem is every new reader always start from beginning, and it will really help yourself if you revise you early work. I'm sure it will encourage many new reader.
i thank you for your time and effort, i wish you goodluck
This is a shame because there seem to be some interesting ideas that I'd love to read about.
9 months ago as of writing this review the Author said that they were going to proofread/edit the start of the novel. Either this hasnt happened or they havent quite done a good enough job.
Overall, a story with interesting ideas, but poor execution lets it down especially when compared to a few of the other system novels.
This novel is disappointing because they give the MC the perfect weapon to tackle the next mission (so if there was a fire demon they would give him a water mage just to be able to counter it perfectly)
The MC's knowledge is barely relevant as the system gives him textbooks on what to do (agriculture etc) Lazy writing and poor plot