While I don't fw heroic mcs per say, i don't hate a well written well either. I like that Takahiro is compassionate and is willing to work hard for his family. My gripes though is the system with a personality, but that's just my personal preference. some logical choices here and there also feel as he's not really thinking about his family, for instance in that moment he tries to stop the mugger which had high chances of injuries that could stop him from working he still rushed in, while admirable i feel as if he's not truely thinking of his family as it could put them ina further financial strain and and situation, and if i truely was thinking about them i'd have handled it another way instead of rushing in. But i've only read 2 chapters though so while i can't say too much on the direction I hope you put realistic and gritty scenes in it that set the real aspect in. That moment he distributed his stats also urked me, I mean at least put 100 in each stat at least bro.Anyways it has potential if given the right direction, character insight and introspection and reflection, your writing is also well done, concise and fairly well paced which i liked. I hope you succeed in the story you wish to carve.
What I've read till now, the beginning is good, but the thing said about making the group is quite far in the story, about 70 chapters, before that is just his daily life using his power and that scenes. But overall, it's good.
This is my first time writing, so if I have mistakes or anything that confuses you guys. please do leave a comment. I will make sure to say on top of all comments and do what I can for all the people who love reading my novel
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