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One of the best original novel i have ever read..as a harem lover..i really like the MC care and attention to each of his harem member. I hope he stays that way till the end of the story. And not too many harem member please, 8 is max i think, so you can give more detail to each of the member.
The MC's talent is just a D-rank and yet it's too OP. There are also a lot of things that doesn't make sense in this novel. I wouldn't really recommend reading this novel.
Very interesting plot and interesting concept.The character seems cool and system 0 is really snarky.I really like the timeline-jumping concept.The only thing that I felt could have been done better is to fix the grammatical errors but that can be fixed using something like Grammarly so no real harm done,
There are only a few chapters, but from them, I can tell you that the writing quality is good, the story is quite interesting, I look forward to reading more, the five-star is well deserved, good job!
The premise of poverty really validates how Jose and Antonio could let themselves in the pitfall of gambling. You've done a great job in portraying the poorest of the poor of the slums of the Philippines. I hope Allaine won't pursue the rabbit hole that his dad got tangled in. I want to see him strive with honesty and dignity. Just one thing, hospital bills could be paid off by an organization. They simply need to be patient and process the endless amount of paperworks.On the other hand, Antonio and Jose is as equally infuriating as Yanlei. Though Jose was better than Antonio, warning his friend of the possible repercussions. They agreed to Yanlei's terms and did not oppose it. They ought to have stopped while the pit was still shallow. I hope they think about the fate of their families in the event that they sink in a gorge of debt while the status of being poor screams at their conscience. In terms of the technicality in writing, there are some grammar mistakes that I could point out. Don't worry, those are easily proof read. As I always say, enabling yourself to master grammar will able you to produce sentences that will flow smoothly. We all make mistakes, so this is merely a constructive criticism and I hope you take it that way. For my suggestion, I think that you should have an auxiliary chapter for explaining some gambling rules. There are readers who already know it, and there are also those who don't. Hence, for a chapter that focuses on the intense gambling sessions, explaining the rules cut's off the *******.You have a great work here and I'm vouching for the story that you've created! The thrill of gambling is well narrated in every chapter. I'm cheering you on!
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