Hey guys!! A typical shameless author’s review is here. First of all, I’d like to say thanks to anyone who is reading this novel and supporting me. You know, every view, review, collection, and power stone mean so much to me. They give me motivations to continue writing this story.
Alright, that’s enough for the formality.
Let’s talk about the storyline. The story is mainly about an MC going back in time to fix the past and create a new/different future for him and human race. But as the story progresses, the MC will realize and discover that there is much more to the supposed simple backstory of his regression. As for what it is or what they are, you have to read it yourself.
Now, for the story’s pace. For the reason of I want to lay as solid foundation as possible to the story, it might cause the pace of the story to be moderate at most at the beginning. Especially, the first 15 chapters of which being focused on some basic knowledge about magic, Ortus, tutorial, his future organization, his friends, and many more. That’s why, when the story progresses to tutorial ark or Ortus ark, you would not get confused with the info dump.
Last but not least, the plots of the story. I can only tell you that, I’ve already planned the main concept and some big events to half of the volume 3. It is just a plan though, it might get changed into another one if I find something better or new inspiration.
P.S: English is not my first language, so, please bear with me :D
Although ive only read 15 chapters so far i can say that this is a really good novel! I didnt see any mistakes, if there are any it is minimal. The story isnt rushed and is thought out.
Im not good at reviews but overall, i would definitely recommend this novel :)
Author, are you going to make a discord server? If so, pls Let me know!
seems cool so far can't wait to read more
filler song
Gunter, why did you gunt my fries?
I gunted them, and they were mine.What kind of gunt gunts his Gunter's fries,
And doesn't even gunt him in the eyes?
Gunter, there were tears there.
If you gunted them, would you even care?Gunter, do you even love me?
I have to say the idea for the novel is really good and interesting enough to pull you in, however I have a list of things that could be improved upon.
- First of, excessive technicalities. I get that there are a lot of thoughts behind the magical sides of this novel for world-building's sake, however the made-up technical stuffs feels too much of a filler.
Even after reading the 50+ chapters, it feels like I've only read 10 chapters of other novels for how little things has happened.
Considering the word count per chapter, the excessive technicalities ended up affecting the story progression.
- Next is the MC's character being all over the place. It's like his character is suffering due to forceful attempts for comic relief.
During his time on earth before the tutorial, he feels like a goal-driven MC similar to korean MCs of the same novel genre. However when he entered the tutorial, he became more like an arrogant self-entitled chinese MC.
I don't know if it's to make him "cool", or "quirky" and set apart from the others because he used to be strong, but it feels more like he's being obnoxious.
- Then there's the case for author's hindsight.
Holding out details and explanations to what is actually happening behind the scenes is actually a double-edged weapon. Remember to always think of how things look like in your readers' eyes.
If you hold an information that will spoil the story for the readers if they know it early, then that's good. But if it turned out to be something that wouldn't change anything if known, or maybe make the readers anticipate what's going to happen, then you're merely taking away the readers' eyes.
It's a choice between mystery and later surprising revelation, and early revelation that could be looked forward to as to how it will turn out in the future.
why don't you update your novel
WE NEED MORE CHAPY
WE NEED MORE CHAP
PLS just some chapter ........................................................................................................
Interesting, but style and grammar are not the author's forte. His writing style is all over the place, falling prey to traps like "But that's a story for another time."
Also, the main character doesn't seem to behave like a wise sage would.
this a great story which is fun to read.... if you are reading reviews to check whether to read or not so just give it a shot. I promise you that u won't regret...[img=recommend]
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Alright, that’s enough for the formality.
Let’s talk about the storyline. The story is mainly about an MC going back in time to fix the past and create a new/different future for him and human race. But as the story progresses, the MC will realize and discover that there is much more to the supposed simple backstory of his regression. As for what it is or what they are, you have to read it yourself.
Now, for the story’s pace. For the reason of I want to lay as solid foundation as possible to the story, it might cause the pace of the story to be moderate at most at the beginning. Especially, the first 15 chapters of which being focused on some basic knowledge about magic, Ortus, tutorial, his future organization, his friends, and many more. That’s why, when the story progresses to tutorial ark or Ortus ark, you would not get confused with the info dump.
Last but not least, the plots of the story. I can only tell you that, I’ve already planned the main concept and some big events to half of the volume 3. It is just a plan though, it might get changed into another one if I find something better or new inspiration.
P.S: English is not my first language, so, please bear with me :D
Im not good at reviews but overall, i would definitely recommend this novel :)
Author, are you going to make a discord server? If so, pls Let me know!
filler song
Gunter, why did you gunt my fries?
I gunted them, and they were mine.What kind of gunt gunts his Gunter's fries,
And doesn't even gunt him in the eyes?
Gunter, there were tears there.
If you gunted them, would you even care?Gunter, do you even love me?
- First of, excessive technicalities. I get that there are a lot of thoughts behind the magical sides of this novel for world-building's sake, however the made-up technical stuffs feels too much of a filler.
Even after reading the 50+ chapters, it feels like I've only read 10 chapters of other novels for how little things has happened.
Considering the word count per chapter, the excessive technicalities ended up affecting the story progression.
- Next is the MC's character being all over the place. It's like his character is suffering due to forceful attempts for comic relief.
During his time on earth before the tutorial, he feels like a goal-driven MC similar to korean MCs of the same novel genre. However when he entered the tutorial, he became more like an arrogant self-entitled chinese MC.
I don't know if it's to make him "cool", or "quirky" and set apart from the others because he used to be strong, but it feels more like he's being obnoxious.
- Then there's the case for author's hindsight.
Holding out details and explanations to what is actually happening behind the scenes is actually a double-edged weapon. Remember to always think of how things look like in your readers' eyes.
If you hold an information that will spoil the story for the readers if they know it early, then that's good. But if it turned out to be something that wouldn't change anything if known, or maybe make the readers anticipate what's going to happen, then you're merely taking away the readers' eyes.
It's a choice between mystery and later surprising revelation, and early revelation that could be looked forward to as to how it will turn out in the future.
WE NEED MORE CHAPY
WE NEED MORE CHAP
PLS just some chapter ........................................................................................................
Also, the main character doesn't seem to behave like a wise sage would.