i have been here since chapter 1 please dont drop this you have made an amazing story and if yoh plan on dropping just make an ending dont blue ball us please
There should be a #Harlem and #incest. I guess some people will like it, but I feel there is so much pointless pornographic chapters. Understand the author is growing. However in some ways the earlier chapters were better craftedI honestly enjoy the story concept and character building. But I got to say there is a lot of POV problems, not sure if it’s meant to be a technic but, the switching of a female character between him and her is confusing. Then there are these sentences structure and strange word choice. At times I felt like I was reading a raw google translation. For me It has started to drag. I also wonder if the author will be able to remember all these character and build them. The author keeps creating what appears to be important character but stops using them, or appears sporadically. ufffcI still enjoy the story and will support but... I have less expectations now.
I honestly think this novel is great! I love the fact that the mc takes an active role in growing his family and not just himself. Keep the good work up and thanks!
Today I'm tired so I wont leave as detailed a review as I normally do.The main problem with this book is that it is painful to read.It is not emotionally painful to read, and not badly written painful to read.It is 'why the hëll did THIS happen?' painful to read.Like I said, I'm tired, don't wanna explain much, so I'll give just one example.MC is born again in a disgüstingly mütilated body. Fine.Young master is törturing her. Okay.Wants her to get räped. Fine.Lacky comes in, thinks she's too disgüsting. Okay.Young master gets distracted. MC tries to escape.The 'loyal' servant of the MC UNEXPECTEDLY shouts when he sees she's escaping, alerting the young master. He'd been watching leisurely btw. And he's loyal, according to the story. I kid you not.All of this is okay.Then there's the system. I don't like how it works. At all.Why 5 stars?Because it's yuri. And the story can improve as it goes on. I'll probably come back to read it once it has more chapters.
The best video game genre i've ever read! I like the two sides of the world, reality and the game world. It feels like reading two types of novels. Totally worth the read
Poorly written storyokay update rateStory is slow and sometimes really froced so that it is weird the person who is absolute ***** becomes his finace and is frist weaker he beats her then gets suddenly stronger without reasons or explenation and 1 hits himcharacters design is bad ***** got name from authors irl person who lifes by him so you can expect a ***** charakter for the entire story worl background is not so good
Never had I read a novel before that kept me wanting to read more, but this one has. I love the wonderful effort you put into your work; the plot is so engaging, the characters are dynamic, and every detail is exquiste. I am very impressed! I hope you continue your writing! Best of luck to you!~ Mrs. Flare 🥰
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