Shameless review by author here.
There are many things than can be improved but I'll give five star to everything since the author is more or less as shameless as the MC here.
My main problem with this story is the lack of descriptions. I have seen no mentions kn the features of the characters, other then they are pretty or have a good body. That is not descriptive enough. Instead of saying talk about their hair color, height, etc. I do like the idea of the story so far and its interesting. Great job so far, keep up the great work!
the development is too fast and the writing grammer is really bad for
someone that has english for their second language and the protagonist
acts like a kid when hes supposed too be 30 years old and the reoson why the slime doesnt talk its dumb
We can see the influence of several novels in this story and it still have its own originality, its in fact a good reading.
The story is narrated in the point of view of the MC with very unique since I cant remenber any other.
The only flaw I have to point is that the author is stingy with the details. If the story take a few lines to describe events like how the magic awakening occur or when he enter an place discribe it briefly the novel will be even better.
I read a few chapters and then I came to know that there will be a prostitute in his harem. And I don't like that idea so I dropped it..........................
Dude I liked the premise and some comedic elements early on, however honestly it became really shitty after trying to implement the harem scenario, try hard style.
Like I thought when he went to kill the monster it could be an interesting arc of him on his own, maybe building more of a bond with Vanessa or vallentina whatever the slime is called, but instead you use it to really cringely push the characters together without thinking, hey maybe the two CHILDREN have parents... Anyway for those who enjoy it continue reading, but I'm out
The characters are introduced and devolp in a terrible way. Every explination about his knowledge is basically “magic” and because hes rhe main character. Also the authors Syntax almost gave me an aneurism trying to read his story without speedreading to force my brain to autocorrect the grammer.
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There are many things than can be improved but I'll give five star to everything since the author is more or less as shameless as the MC here.
someone that has english for their second language and the protagonist
acts like a kid when hes supposed too be 30 years old and the reoson why the slime doesnt talk its dumb
The story is narrated in the point of view of the MC with very unique since I cant remenber any other.
The only flaw I have to point is that the author is stingy with the details. If the story take a few lines to describe events like how the magic awakening occur or when he enter an place discribe it briefly the novel will be even better.
The overall concept is interesting and the pacing and plot are pretty good.
Like I thought when he went to kill the monster it could be an interesting arc of him on his own, maybe building more of a bond with Vanessa or vallentina whatever the slime is called, but instead you use it to really cringely push the characters together without thinking, hey maybe the two CHILDREN have parents... Anyway for those who enjoy it continue reading, but I'm out