The Immortal Player

Couldn't get too far into the story. nor did I get to experience too much. I might come back to it in the future, but until the author gets an editor to fix the really bad grammar, I can't stand to read it. I looked forward to reading it, after seeing the synopsis, but when reading it makes my head hurt, I refuse to continue reading it.

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Meh. Too boring, naive and insipid to continue reading. The hero and his life are poorly revealed, sometimes not realistic. From the beginning of the beta-test a line of cheats begins and- No, this is too stereotyped to continue reading.

So let’s review this story, I’ll be honest the story ain’t exactly groundbreaking in any way, however I still do enjoy it a bit. My main problems with the story mostly comes from the lack of editer, I’m not sure if it’s just me, but I feel the stories writing feels incredibly hectic at points, not in a fast paste way, but just jumping really quickly between various actions

The characters are shockingly more fleshed out than your typical wuxia novel which is honestly surprising to me so kudos to you on that

Game mechanics are iffy at best and awful at worst, I generally dislike the perma death game thing that a few novels have, xp distribution is also a bit questionable. I feel like author could have benefitted from just making it a system novel with a gate system like “super gene”

My best suggestion to you author would be find a friend you trust to give an honest opinion and make him proof read it a little bit

This is actually a really good story so far >~< when I started it last night, I genuinely didn't think much of it, due to the grammatical errors and such, as well as the fact that the other 2 webnovels I've read were both really well known with few errors and stuff. But, I find this one just as interesting and in-depth ^-^ 10/10 would recommend

its just god mode 24/7 + teenage love. I just cat read this novel. If u are 15years old or less you can try it. But for anyone 16+ it will be a terrible novel.

Wat can I say,
this is just that good a novel. The story building is awesome.the genre may be the same but the story creativity takes it to another level. well 4 me anyways