While Arthur looked around to learn the area, he dodged a fireball that went directly to him, slowly rising from the ground to see where the fireball came from, observed his father dragonified in the skies as he explained that his training of the day was in which he had to run for his life or fight against him so as not to end up like a roast chicken.
overall story is good and FL character is good but you should focus on FL character and you should tone down the explaining. its like you are explaining from your point of you but you are trying to 3rd p.o.v
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