The Hidden Evil

Hi. The author here. This is a based of a world I have been creating for a long time. Gonna publish at least 3000-4000 words a week so be expecting 2-3 updates a week at first at least. I know my writing is the weakest part of my novel, but I am extremely happy to get criticism since I want to improve on the parts I am lacking so if you find a grammar mistake can you tell me what mistake and where? It might be a one I didn't just spot or is just a mistake I have been repeating a lot.Thank you all

The story's backstory can be expanded and there are few parts that need some factual reading on the author's side so that it follows the story's logic much better otherwise the story I feel is average.

pretty good for a first start, author pretty much improved with all the suggestions previously given in their old book

I like it.  Not really a fan of the off brand Slime function, maybe it'll get better in time or something, but definitely a good.  5/5 recommend.

good story captured emotion perfectly, keep it up the good work