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This a short but great read. The MC is pretty versatile and smart. The only downside is that the story has stopped. Please start writing it again I love this story!!
Please Post More (: the novel that you wrote is one of the best that I have ever read online. So keep going, talent shouldn't just vanish. As for the viewers be sure to read this novel.
Thoroughly mediocre, and sub-par in some categories.
Easy read, not a complicated story, turn brains off for plot holes, turn brains on for grammar.
Let's start with the story. So far, there isn't much, but that is to be expected. The thing that drives me insane is the brokenness of the gacha. It's just a way to give the MC the stuff he needs. It's always rare, great, epic or needed. Herbs won't grow in the dungeon? don't worry, the next gacha will fix that. Want to start smithing? The gacha giveth. Unlimited materials? The gacha has your back. MC should make a shrine to the gacha and the dungeon core. Sorry, but I really hate some kind of plot device that constantly gives the MC whatever he needs at the moment for virtually no cost or effort.
Speaking of the dungeon core, she is a non-character. No personality except exceptionally timid. You don't see, hear or notice her at all until she is required to pass on a message or as comic relief. Same for Kuro. The bandits need a course in Banditry 101. The most interesting quirky one was a passing adventurer. The MC dungeon master, Mr Ghost, hasn't shown much personality either except 'grandfatherly' towards a young boy. The boy's guards should be executed for being too stupid too. Mr Ghost will manage all skills. He will smith, do alchemy, fight with sword, spear, bow and magic and basically be everything this story needs and do everything that needs doing.... Right.
There is no info on what a dungeon is or does, no feeling for their place in the world. Either it's something that will come up later, or it is assumed you have read similar novels before. So far, no world building.
It was updating regularly until january.
Finally, the writing. It's average for not very good non-native English. The sentences mostly make sense with no bad idiom, but the tenses are hopelessly mixed up. Even worse if the verb is also a noun, like a a walk / to walk. It appears the spell check the author is using is hopeless at that.
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Easy read, not a complicated story, turn brains off for plot holes, turn brains on for grammar.
Let's start with the story. So far, there isn't much, but that is to be expected. The thing that drives me insane is the brokenness of the gacha. It's just a way to give the MC the stuff he needs. It's always rare, great, epic or needed. Herbs won't grow in the dungeon? don't worry, the next gacha will fix that. Want to start smithing? The gacha giveth. Unlimited materials? The gacha has your back. MC should make a shrine to the gacha and the dungeon core. Sorry, but I really hate some kind of plot device that constantly gives the MC whatever he needs at the moment for virtually no cost or effort.
Speaking of the dungeon core, she is a non-character. No personality except exceptionally timid. You don't see, hear or notice her at all until she is required to pass on a message or as comic relief. Same for Kuro. The bandits need a course in Banditry 101. The most interesting quirky one was a passing adventurer. The MC dungeon master, Mr Ghost, hasn't shown much personality either except 'grandfatherly' towards a young boy. The boy's guards should be executed for being too stupid too. Mr Ghost will manage all skills. He will smith, do alchemy, fight with sword, spear, bow and magic and basically be everything this story needs and do everything that needs doing.... Right.
There is no info on what a dungeon is or does, no feeling for their place in the world. Either it's something that will come up later, or it is assumed you have read similar novels before. So far, no world building.
It was updating regularly until january.
Finally, the writing. It's average for not very good non-native English. The sentences mostly make sense with no bad idiom, but the tenses are hopelessly mixed up. Even worse if the verb is also a noun, like a a walk / to walk. It appears the spell check the author is using is hopeless at that.