The game of revenge

It's really cool, you have a fertile imagination, I feel like I'm watching a movie in the cinema. I really like that you made Rocky remember his life. I feel warm when he talks about his mother and sister

Interesting story.

First off, I'd like to say that I like all the large paragrpahs you have. Never a detail missed. There are a lot of competing ideas, and as a writer who loves mixing different medias into his books, I really enjoyed that part.

Good job so far!

Ten chapters in and this story is already SO good. I really want to read further. Keep it up! I love the characters and the world. Poor rocky :(

I was really surprised on how soo many different concepts and ideas were used in this story. There's aliens, time travel, revenge, super powers in this story and even with soo much on the plate it feels it's been executed well. Yes, there are moments were it feels too fast or too much, but with such complexity in the story I would have been surprised if there weren't any such moments. But I do feel things can get a little slow for good at some parts. But with that aside, I feel the world building is really done greatly! It is really well written and it keeps me intrigued to read more! Keep up the good work author!

Interesting plot with superb characters. The way Thomas made conspiracies with other world people is extremely annoying and interesting. Anna's character deserves sympathy but hate too. Love Prime Minister innocence.

Really interesting concepts and set up.

Seems like the story has a few too many ideas that are kinda competing with one another while trying to establish what the plot will be about. I keeps things interesting but also a little unfocused.

I feel like the pacing goes a tad too fast at times with too many characters being introduced, too many things happening, and too many rules about how this world works being established one after another.

Probably my advice would be trying to espace out the events a bit and focus more on smaller things like character detail.

We get things like time travel, aliens, people coming back from the dead, robbery... But I find it hard to get invested cause I feel like I know so little about these people.

The dialog also doesn't help. Everyone talks so much but it's mostly exposition explaining what's going on and what they're doing. Dialogs that sometimes go on for gigantic paragraphs.

Meanwhile, the actual events like kidnapping a baby only last for a short while.

I feel there is a need for people to say less and do more, and allow the reader to learn more from those actions .

Interesting concept off the rip, looking forward to seeing more chapters out of this author! With more focus and time I believe this novel has a great chance to succeed!

WOW... It's recommended!
At first, when I saw the cover, I think this is the story about an old grandpa... and soon after I read the synopsis, it hooked me... even more, after I read some chapters, it got my heart... will put it into my collection for sure... I will be waiting for more chapters...
best of luck author..