The Forgotten Forge

i have been waiting for more of these space mercenary novels, and this definitely is a good read as of now, at least for me it has everything I hoped for.                                                                                             thx author I hope it gets more updates 👍💙

It's not a bad fanfiction with an idea similar to the lord, but as for me, I need to open up the world more, work with the characters, make them less flat, give them character. To reveal more about the game he played about the kingdom, it's also worth working on the character of the Main Character. Let's just say it would be interesting to follow the humble protagonist, who has almost no flaws, and power does not spoil him. It will be an interesting story if the main character is not perfect, but with his own problems. for example, arrogance or some other qualities. A person who did not have power before , and then suddenly has power, cannot remain the same person. It is also worth revealing more about magic. Our main character does not use magic, but only skills, that is, he will learn how to use magic, he will become stronger, maybe not much, but it will add a variety of attacks. Revealing the magic would be interesting. I also ask the author to work on the mind of the main character's opponents, I understand our MC hero, but some victories will only bring boredom. Make sure that His Opponents are also smart, otherwise he kills the best adventurers and marshals of the kingdoms somehow quickly. I'm also thinking about other worlds, too, because now he He knows that there are other worlds and it is a sin not to take advantage of this. in general, Istria is not bad, there are pros and cons, there is something to work on, but most importantly, I hope the author listens and makes the story even better, as well as explain the MC's actions, his plans and everything else, we will add more specifics.

Great start and everything, even if the humor kind of clashes with the huge misery sandwich that is the beginning, but the update speed worries me. I know that us authors are busy folk but still. And also. HILLBILLIES. Loved that. Will read more later.