This is what I think I deserve after all of my soul I have poured in to this. I rewrote 80k words and what you see now is the rewritten version. I can't say for sure that now this book is the best you have ever read but its the best I have ever written among all of my other works :D
If you have qns, criticism, praises, or anything else just reply to this XD
Today I'm tired so I wont leave as detailed a review as I normally do.
The main problem with this book is that it is painful to read.
It is not emotionally painful to read, and not badly written painful to read.
It is 'why the hëll did THIS happen?' painful to read.
Like I said, I'm tired, don't wanna explain much, so I'll give just one example.
MC is born again in a disgüstingly mütilated body. Fine.
Young master is törturing her. Okay.
Wants her to get räped. Fine.
Lacky comes in, thinks she's too disgüsting. Okay.
Young master gets distracted. MC tries to escape.
The 'loyal' servant of the MC UNEXPECTEDLY shouts when he sees she's escaping, alerting the young master. He'd been watching leisurely btw. And he's loyal, according to the story. I kid you not.
All of this is okay.
Then there's the system. I don't like how it works. At all.
Why 5 stars?
Because it's yuri. And the story can improve as it goes on. I'll probably come back to read it once it has more chapters.
I suddenly realised that I had yet to review this book. So… here goes nothing.
Short review: It’s a really good read. The stats speak for themselves.
Long review:
Writing quality: Not the best there is. Honestly, it can even be quite confusing at first. But the rate at which the dear author improved is scary. The writing in the later chapters might even drag you into the world inside the book. That being said, it might not be the best in WN, but not that far from it.
Update Stability: It’s as stable as stable could be. Expect at least one chapter everyday, or even some ‘accidental’ mass releases.
Story development: It’s not the most unique of stories. But fret not. A story is not driven by its uniqueness. It’s driven by ‘questions’ and ‘answers’, at least to me. And the way dear author used these elements is fine enough to keep you intrigued, to turn those pages (or scroll that screen to be precise).
Character design: Here again, the elements of ‘Questions’ and ‘Answers’ are used. The major characters have depth and an air of mystery. But keep reading, the air of mystery will subside but depth- will increase, slowly but surely.
World background: It’s a typical Eastern fantasy setting. So those of you who are veterans (and I assume that most of you are) can easily get accustomed to the world.
i gave this book an honest chance but please dont waste your time. i read until ch25 and came out more confused than i ever. also considering theres only positive comments left on this book, i dont see how the author is not deleting bad comments. i cant even give constructive criticism because i cant make sense of this story. i started with hating the MC and by ch25, i now hate the author. i honestly feel like i lost brain cells by reading this.
Poor guy, sees the love of his life getting married to another guy and then gets hit by a truck and has his face smashed in. Then he goes to a cultivation world. Oh and be becomes a woman lol. Well, seems like an interesting start, lets see where it goes from here.
The story is really very interesting since the character will have to see them as a woman in addition to not knowing anything about cultivation, the way the events unfold makes you want to keep reading since it turns out to be entertaining. The personalities of the people of the cultivation world are very well represented; I like the interactions since they are fluid.
Well I suppose that the protagonist will have to accept who he is XD. I would advise other readers to read this novel.
PS: The way you narrate is fine. You are on the right track as a writer!
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If you have qns, criticism, praises, or anything else just reply to this XD
The main problem with this book is that it is painful to read.
It is not emotionally painful to read, and not badly written painful to read.
It is 'why the hëll did THIS happen?' painful to read.
Like I said, I'm tired, don't wanna explain much, so I'll give just one example.
MC is born again in a disgüstingly mütilated body. Fine.
Young master is törturing her. Okay.
Wants her to get räped. Fine.
Lacky comes in, thinks she's too disgüsting. Okay.
Young master gets distracted. MC tries to escape.
The 'loyal' servant of the MC UNEXPECTEDLY shouts when he sees she's escaping, alerting the young master. He'd been watching leisurely btw. And he's loyal, according to the story. I kid you not.
All of this is okay.
Then there's the system. I don't like how it works. At all.
Why 5 stars?
Because it's yuri. And the story can improve as it goes on. I'll probably come back to read it once it has more chapters.
Short review: It’s a really good read. The stats speak for themselves.
Long review:
Writing quality: Not the best there is. Honestly, it can even be quite confusing at first. But the rate at which the dear author improved is scary. The writing in the later chapters might even drag you into the world inside the book. That being said, it might not be the best in WN, but not that far from it.
Update Stability: It’s as stable as stable could be. Expect at least one chapter everyday, or even some ‘accidental’ mass releases.
Story development: It’s not the most unique of stories. But fret not. A story is not driven by its uniqueness. It’s driven by ‘questions’ and ‘answers’, at least to me. And the way dear author used these elements is fine enough to keep you intrigued, to turn those pages (or scroll that screen to be precise).
Character design: Here again, the elements of ‘Questions’ and ‘Answers’ are used. The major characters have depth and an air of mystery. But keep reading, the air of mystery will subside but depth- will increase, slowly but surely.
World background: It’s a typical Eastern fantasy setting. So those of you who are veterans (and I assume that most of you are) can easily get accustomed to the world.
And finally… it’s YURIIIIIIII!!!!
Give it a try and you won’t regret it. Thanks.
Well I suppose that the protagonist will have to accept who he is XD. I would advise other readers to read this novel.
PS: The way you narrate is fine. You are on the right track as a writer!