I like the characters in the story, but I feel the grammar could seriously use some work. Comparing the latest chapter to the first chapter, the authors grammar already improved so I'd go back and fix the first few chapters. Maybe incorporate an outline and also increase the pacing... I'd also work more on the descriptions of battles, but overall I liked what I saw besides the mistakes...
Nice book. The concept is interesting, and most especially the ending parts of chapter one caught my attention, leaving me with a crave for more. Good work author.
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Shiro was Karma's other half, his twin. However, although the two were twins, they were completely different. She was kind, generous, attentive, capable while Karma was rash, stubborn, and an overall annoyance to everyone around him. With Karma being born with nothing, Shiro was born with the one thing Karma desired: power.
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