Despite having technical errors in the chapters, the author still was able to convey the premise of the story to me and elaborate it through character development, action-reaction, and conflict.
I like how you incorporated first person perspective and having the balance of thought and plot. Many authors that tried to write like that often failed to convey such a simple premise. You did just fine.
Though, not a fan of idols type of novels, I took my time to read the available chapters of your work.
Firstly, the quality of your writing. I think your writing is good. Good grammar, tenses and phrases. Only minor errors which I've pointed out in the comments.
Secondly, the rate of updates. This is excellent so far.
Thirdly, the nature of your characters. I believe you understand the logic behind character formation and development. Your MC is of great character, even the side characters are all good. Well eritten characters.
Fourthly, story line. Right from chapter one, your story is progressing well. From the MC in a new environment to the beginning of his role in his new environment. Steady and focus storyline.
And lastly, the world building. Though, I'm not a fan of this world, it's well written. The little of the world I've read is a proof of that.
As many of people said in the comments, Idols are not my cup of tea for two reasons: I've lived in Tokyo and got soo fed up with it and second it is always the same comedy.
About the novel, it is actually fun, but you have to like Japanese comedy, otherwise, you just won't get jokes. I personally laughed a lot.
Characters are funny and adorable, Araragi kept reminding me of the Monogatari series.
And the dark part of my really wanted the whole show to go dark 'à la' Perfect blue... But that's just me, gotta see a doctor :)
Overall, if you like reading manage and shonen, I recommend it!
Ever since I read Penguin Revolution, I've liked the manager/producer trope in light novels and CNs. The high school drama I could do without, however, since very few writers do it well.
In the initial chapter, the MC is immediately plunged into a daily life full of complication, and the subsequent chapters certainly are built well on the foundation of the first.
From the first chapter to succeeding chapters, the motivation of the MC to put his best effort into idol managing is also shown, though I look forward to seeing how that motivation matures in the future. He's certainly a go-getter, so it promises to be interesting.
While the character of the MC is set up well, I'd like to see a bit more set up in the character of the girls in the chapters following their introductory scenes.
The pacing is good, the plot is developing nicely. But, what the heck, if this is discount Haruhi Suzumiya, I will cry. Big fat ugly tears. Author, you are warned~ ;]
The grammar is good enough, but needs work. The plot and the MC give the story enough charm that the reader is drawn more and more into the world.
This story about the travails of Araragi Hideki, I definitely recommend it. Fight on, Araragi Hideki!
Omg! The plotline for this is something I would usually go for, and everything is quite intriguing. The story is very much easy to read, and there are not much grammatical errors.
This usually isn't a type of book I would personally pick out, but I was pleasantly surprised by how organized and efficient the author presented it. It's very in-depth in a professional understanding as well as giving ”highschoolers” a better look as they were exhibited as mature, secure giving, devoted individuals that sought out a dream to become an idol and I honestly believe even with the struggles and the determination of others wanting their downfall, they will succeed!
I also wanted to make a point, the ”Manger, ” may have had his struggles, to this day, but with the determination, he broadcasts in gaining the audience to promote the ”Cherry Blossoms, ” I honestly feel that he may like it more then he realizes. Maybe it's not just about the money he will earn by managing this idol club?!
One suggestion I would consider is to check out ”Grammarly, ” it is a fantastic program that helps with punctuation and grammatical errors. Within your story, I have noticed a couple of errors, as well as the changing of characters ”Pov.” It can get a little confusing regarding who is talking at the moment; I suggest titling the top of each change though it is nothing major, I believe it will help the flow and overall understanding of your story.
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I like how you incorporated first person perspective and having the balance of thought and plot. Many authors that tried to write like that often failed to convey such a simple premise. You did just fine.
Firstly, the quality of your writing. I think your writing is good. Good grammar, tenses and phrases. Only minor errors which I've pointed out in the comments.
Secondly, the rate of updates. This is excellent so far.
Thirdly, the nature of your characters. I believe you understand the logic behind character formation and development. Your MC is of great character, even the side characters are all good. Well eritten characters.
Fourthly, story line. Right from chapter one, your story is progressing well. From the MC in a new environment to the beginning of his role in his new environment. Steady and focus storyline.
And lastly, the world building. Though, I'm not a fan of this world, it's well written. The little of the world I've read is a proof of that.
Keep up the good work.
About the novel, it is actually fun, but you have to like Japanese comedy, otherwise, you just won't get jokes. I personally laughed a lot.
Characters are funny and adorable, Araragi kept reminding me of the Monogatari series.
And the dark part of my really wanted the whole show to go dark 'à la' Perfect blue... But that's just me, gotta see a doctor :)
Overall, if you like reading manage and shonen, I recommend it!
In the initial chapter, the MC is immediately plunged into a daily life full of complication, and the subsequent chapters certainly are built well on the foundation of the first.
From the first chapter to succeeding chapters, the motivation of the MC to put his best effort into idol managing is also shown, though I look forward to seeing how that motivation matures in the future. He's certainly a go-getter, so it promises to be interesting.
While the character of the MC is set up well, I'd like to see a bit more set up in the character of the girls in the chapters following their introductory scenes.
The pacing is good, the plot is developing nicely. But, what the heck, if this is discount Haruhi Suzumiya, I will cry. Big fat ugly tears. Author, you are warned~ ;]
The grammar is good enough, but needs work. The plot and the MC give the story enough charm that the reader is drawn more and more into the world.
This story about the travails of Araragi Hideki, I definitely recommend it. Fight on, Araragi Hideki!
I also wanted to make a point, the ”Manger, ” may have had his struggles, to this day, but with the determination, he broadcasts in gaining the audience to promote the ”Cherry Blossoms, ” I honestly feel that he may like it more then he realizes. Maybe it's not just about the money he will earn by managing this idol club?!
One suggestion I would consider is to check out ”Grammarly, ” it is a fantastic program that helps with punctuation and grammatical errors. Within your story, I have noticed a couple of errors, as well as the changing of characters ”Pov.” It can get a little confusing regarding who is talking at the moment; I suggest titling the top of each change though it is nothing major, I believe it will help the flow and overall understanding of your story.
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