Ok, Ima be straight with you bro. This was painful to read. The dialogue is rough, although clear. I mean to say that while the grammar is good, some of what they're saying makes no sense if you think about it from the way an actual conversation works and flows. Granted, I didn't read that far, but if you think about the dialogue in the conversations you're writing and it doesn't make sense to you, it probably will not make sense to readers. I don't say this at all as hate or anything, I say this in encouragement. Believe me, your work so far is not at all as bad as others I've seen, by far. Good job so far and good luck.
For everyone asking about what chapter to start at from the manhwa, I really recommend starting this book from the beginning. The manwha cuts a lot of the information from the book, and the book is overall much better IMO
The most horrifying thing about Professor William was that his wife ended up dead and his daughter in a whorehouse, only his boy escaped that massacre. I guess that incident scared a lot of people."
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