The story seems interesting enough from what I've read, however the author clearly needs an editor and someone who can help him with overall sentence structure. This clearly isn't the authors first language however there is potential in the novel, he just needs someone to brush up the errors he's made, as long as someone can help him with editing then I see potential for the novel.
Really recommend an editor so that the flow of the story isn’t interrupted. Should at least re-read so that sentences are properly made. ********************
I cannot say whether it is the writer or translator that is to blame, but this work needs help. Badly.
Weak character design and poorly translated. Still unable to figure out what direction this story will take. From the story element changes from chapter to chapter it feels more 'crown sourced' than anything.
Tem uma cara muito boa, pena que essa imagen de perfil é muito escrota, favor mudar, a inspiração é legalzinha, continue nessa obra bro.... tem meu apoio moral.
Açúcar com pão, tem assento no u de açúcar, favor lembrar disso, pois é muito importante na hora de ffazer um bolo açúcarado
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if you want to take a break .be sure to tell us. atleast we won't be bored waiting for new chapter
Weak character design and poorly translated. Still unable to figure out what direction this story will take. From the story element changes from chapter to chapter it feels more 'crown sourced' than anything.
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Not even the synopsis is immune, at least use grammarly.
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