So gaming stories aren't really my thing but I will say this story was quite enjoyable. Really liked the plot (although I wish the blurb had been written better - it really undermines the story) and characters were amazing. I'm really curious about how the two characters are going to get on.
Grammar was okay but there were times it was a little messy with missing punctuation and capital letters. Otherwise, I'm excited to see where this author takes this story.
WOW THIS BOOK IS PRETTY AWESOME!
Never thought one would fell into trouble this way. But, the story, the back ground, world building, character development all are significantly great and outstanding.
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Keep up the great work.
Reading few the first batch of chapters was rather delightful.
Theo has a great sense of pacing and character, and it really comes out in how his MC interacts with the people around him.
There's a great sense of realism in how the MC thinks and responds, and overall I feel this story is a solid start that will blossom into something amazing.
That said, there are some noticeable errors in writing that can be easily fixed with an editing pass or two, and I feel like more can be done to distinguish the settings, especially where the games occur.
Now this is what I like, the story is simple yet effective the emotions of characters can be felt easily and the author had done a great job portraying scenarios
Nice start. It gives me player one vibes, and the general atmosphere of your writing is pretty upbeat and bright, it’s good vibes. First person is pretty difficult to pull of but your doing a good job so far
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Grammar was okay but there were times it was a little messy with missing punctuation and capital letters. Otherwise, I'm excited to see where this author takes this story.
Never thought one would fell into trouble this way. But, the story, the back ground, world building, character development all are significantly great and outstanding.
Like the book and add.
Keep up the great work.
Theo has a great sense of pacing and character, and it really comes out in how his MC interacts with the people around him.
There's a great sense of realism in how the MC thinks and responds, and overall I feel this story is a solid start that will blossom into something amazing.
That said, there are some noticeable errors in writing that can be easily fixed with an editing pass or two, and I feel like more can be done to distinguish the settings, especially where the games occur.
Solid 4.6 for now.