the concept is great and new.there are less fanfics in this genre.I just hope you will stop the s*x jokes and stop spoiling the story.I really enjoyed other than that part.low rating only because of the s*x jokes part as it is occupying major part of the story.well i know that this is your fanfic I am just suggesting this as it will make story more enjoyable.
To make money or lose money is a problem lol. Make more money causes lossing money and lossing money make greater amount of money. To ubderstand what I said, go read this comdy story XD.
So this is kind of similar to The King's Avatar. We got our MC who made a promise to stop playing a certain MOBA if he lost and he did so he moved onto another MOBA which is League of Legends. He is great at it and that's all there really is to it rn. I mean there are some interesting characters, but they haven't really been fleshed out yet. BTW MC is in highschool 3rd year which means that he is going to a university next year. There is some conflict with his parents about his love for gaming, but I don't think it will be a plot point. Based on summary it seems like he will become a professional gamer for League. Any it was a fun read, but nothing really special. It took about 10 chapters to cover one match of league when it was being focused on so these 22 chapters should give a good dose of what to expect from the story.
dear author, the story is quite captive and a good deal of time. The story of high school students always got me. The ways his life changed after break up its interesting to read. keep it up dear.......
Writing quality is pretty disappointing. The premise is interesting and I believe that this novel certainly could be good. It’s just I can’t deal with the amount of mistakes and choppy sentence structure. I understand that your first language probably isn’t English and as such I’m still giving you a decent review. People obviously like your work so keep at it. :)
It's an interesting story and theme, i wonder how will the worldbuilding looks like, can't wait for the next chapter!Good luck for the author!!Hope this novel could become a hit and continue for a long time!
The image of my parents became increasingly difficult to visualize, I felt a knot in my stomach and could not make a sound to vent. I want to reach them and not let them go, but my body doesn't respond.
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