I love this story and the premises of it but I just have a couple things that I feel like for me are lowering the quality of the story. I have gotten to like chapter 105+ and I hate that we spent more chapters on the two girls he meant randomly than his parents and his family. I’d love to see some authentic family interactions not just when the MC wants something or is informing them of something. They fought to have him so we should see more of this relationship. Second is I wish we have more character development for the MC cuz half the time he is emotionless and we barely see his emotions to people around him. I wish the story revolved around more about his family, school/teachers and maybe his other careers and business. The harem thing is way to early for him as just a 11 yr old and it just feels weird. Either way I’m barely hanging on to stay with this story and not give up half way so hopefully things get better down more chapters.
Great chapter and I hope your mom comes out ok, my one piece of constructive criticism is that the new rave needed a bit of foreshadowing since it felt like it came out of left field.
Hahaha, I love this book. The beginning in fact was so well written with no punctuation errors. The ideas, character design, story development, world background 💯. My little dragon is easily an amazing author, also the penalty for failing to complete the quest 😆😆😆that was hilarious.Harsh but hilarious.The descriptions caught me off guard, they were so gruesome and precise. I mean come on, onions really? For someone like me who's imagination is at its peak, I couldn't have explained her death better myself.Lastly, the MC's name is unique. Ruby, eh? Hmmm, now that I think about it, it was a crystal that helped him escape death's door. If the crystal had been red it would be a perfect synchronization with his name.So little information in the first chapter but anyone could tell how much he loves his family.Once again. I. LOVE. THIS. BOOK.It's amazing, keep it up Author.If you remain consistent, I can assure you that this book would have a large fanbase in the future 🥂
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I love the book. Not just some run of the mill novel that has like 10 versions ghat are totally the same, no this is creative and very good to read. my only critic is that the author makes a flipping Cliffhanger every chapter... i mean just...
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