in cultivation type novel ..there is a difference in immortal cultivator and mortals..not only in strength..but also intelligences and thinking.a young cultivator thinking and intelligence exceed ordinary mortal of same age .this logic is missing in this novel.characters behave too childish mc portrayed as too dumb ..like he can not speak up is mind only complain in his head.he does not like attention.but in some scene he thinks why no body is looking at me?.. MC can comprehend every thing and any thing but first he need to compared how to talk is mind out. and a bit of intelligenceFL character is too irritating ,brainless,very lustfully, its OK to portrait her as loli but there is limit to it.author need to be mature.story can be great if author can take care of certain thing while portraying the behavior of the characters. otherwise reader will lose interest .what is use if plot is powerful but character behave silly
There arent to many chapters yet so i cant give an accurate review however from what ive read this novel has great potential. I would love to read more. keep it up:)
Ako 'to si Tenk, I've read the your story na. The plot is normal and you could see right through it and you will already know what will happen to them. The MC is not likable but I think there will be a character development that will soon arise. But maybe the ideas of mine that pop into my brain might be wrong but despite the fact it is still well written and worth to read. There is still more rooms for improvement but don't be discourage, you did great and I might as well finish your story. This story has potential and the author too. Keep writing!
"Save it for after we deal with this mob! I wish Ver was here, she could gulp them all down or kill them with an explosion or something. Ryuu could too, but she never uses explosion magic for some reason" (Mae)
"He is a powerful mutant that almost destroyed part of the shopping district. If not for me being there many people would have died. I was thinking of taking him with us since i am the only one capable of stopping him when his power gets out of control." I blurt out.
It didn't take him long to understand that this yellow-faced man was definitely a warrior way above his level. The yellow-faced man was just looking at him, without intentionally releasing any energy to pressure him at all, but Shi Yan already felt like he was as untouchable as a steady mountain.
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