I'mma be honest first 3 or so chapters were really good and I was excited for the rest. The writing quality could be a little better but I'm just being a little bit picky. However I feel like everything when he got to the highschool was just not that good though. For example "the big breasted beauty" ok fine if you were just talking about her breasts... whatever; Not every other time you are talking about her though! It just comes across as lazy. Also, don't make a girl get a crush on him from walking in the room it's kinda awkward. I get that you may like anime but the mc speaks interchangeably different languages and you didn't translate ecchi to pervert or something similar? Sorry I don't want to be too harsh. I'll still read it as well. But the writing makes the girls seem very 2 dimensional and just not very interesting. I don't want to try to tell you what to do but at least in my opinion the story would be much more compelling and interesting if you made the girls less like the 2d cutouts in bad harem anime.Finally this is not super important but Is the MC black? I mean I assumed so since he was one of the first humans. Not to be racist or anything but almost no one in Japan is black so usually it would usually be noted in a Japanese girls internal thoughts. Is that why everyone comments on how black his hair and eyes are?I don't usually post criticism but I liked the story at the start so I wanted to give my 2 cents.
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