Pokemon the fate of the oni

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I think it's cool you took inspiration from Vampire System, but you made it way way too similar my dude. I'd suggest reworking from the beginning.

I really liked it, and the writing is one of the best I've read among many contracted writers, specially the character of connie was really well made, I liked that you tried something unique to what norms are following now days and how you presented it fabulously, keep up, good work

The writing style is awesome, the story is intriguing and I am so inlove with Alex here. let's see what happens. keep the good work Author!

idk it's good but like develop the story l. I need him to get a girl.

I'm only on Chapter 5, but the story is already interesting. I've been hooked by Ivie right away, and especially Gaga—my favorite, haha! Anyway, every dialogue in each conversation is well-written, not boring, and entertaining to read. 5 star for me...