The standouts for me were the character descriptions, the MC's outlook (dry, sarcastic, blunt -- my bread and butter) and the setting. Clemen's description rips.
I'm instantly intrigued with the introduction and again at the conclusion. There's just enough told to maintain interest; no agonizing over speed bumps or minute detail, rather, it feels like a well-paced unraveling of important pieces that doesn't overdo itself and never overstays its welcome. 'Course it's only one chapter though so hopefully it keeps up.
I rather enjoy the pace at which this story takes place, as it is at the time of writing this review. It gave me enough info of the setting and characters to be intrigued in a succinct fashion, character descriptions and the general language used is creative and entertaining, and the scenario posed in this story is thrilling and totally unique to me. I fully intend to keep reading as updates continue.
Great world building so far. Concept is unique to me and the characters are easy enough to visualize based on their descriptions. Just watch out for comma splices and minor syntax issues moving forward and you've got yourself a story!
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I'm instantly intrigued with the introduction and again at the conclusion. There's just enough told to maintain interest; no agonizing over speed bumps or minute detail, rather, it feels like a well-paced unraveling of important pieces that doesn't overdo itself and never overstays its welcome. 'Course it's only one chapter though so hopefully it keeps up.