Man I like the story so far but man is the grammar horrible. Sometimes I don’t even know if Mc is a female, narrator or a kid named Chris. Idk if it’ the translations or the author keeps Messing up with points of views
Hello, two years have passed, due to things in life I left my work unfinished, I had good bad moments during this time like anyone else, but I really don't want to leave my work half done, that's why I took the original material, reviewed it as soon as possible. I corrected it as well as changing some plot holes in order to have a better version, I hope that the new readers, as well as the old ones who had read it before, enjoy it.
This Needs Serious Editing before becoming readable ! So many grammatical mistakes ! World background is almost non-existent ! Too much focus explanations on every useless thing(explanations mostly are all boring so they must explain necessary stuff and shorten it as much as possible leaving place for plot, but here its complete opposite), but when it comes to about necessary things giving explanation about how mc chose and worked in his now chosen profession with all damn time skips and especially power levels there is None. Since they were in orphanage there was never mentioned what power levels they reached accurately and on what power levels were their enemies. Action and Skills needs also huge improvement and better explanation, but with this horrible writing quality everything is Useless, Unreadable !
Too much grammatical mistakes, most of the time you won't able to differentiate who he's referring to......And damn energy really...what is this, you combined soul energy and mana and was too lazy to name it and thus it became damn energy...like literally,try to be a little more innovative...
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This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
I think your writing is pretty good, just a couple of complaints and that is in the translation, confusing genders. I may suggest that you get an editor to assist you. I am at chapter 12 and the story line is very good. I sincerely hope you do not decide to drop the story.
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