Shaping up to be a good story. Don't let any mean comments get you down as you continue to write. Over time, everything will fall into place.
My only advice is trying to not make the MC too overpowered too fast, or the side characters too mindless or uninteresting.
All in all, keep up the good work
It seems to have a good start, with a System that, for now, serves no purpose other than showing the MC's progress (at least from the explanation given in chapter 5). There’s an interesting idea about the banquet, where it’s not just for socializing with nobles and recruiting talents, but we might actually see real duels (which will definitely happen, since this unique characteristic of the banquet was mentioned). So, I'm very curious to see how it will continue and how the duels will unfold.
Good start, albeit some little mistake here and there, it is totally normal for a new writer! The world building is really interesting and it has a lot of potential! Would totally recommend
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My only advice is trying to not make the MC too overpowered too fast, or the side characters too mindless or uninteresting.
All in all, keep up the good work
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Mohakejd