Naruto: Chronicles of a Fire Ninja

Really everything was fine until the mc got emotionally blackmailed into accepting another girl.  It’s really disappointing. Even the relationship with the other girl is really flat and is just nice to read or to be ignored. And no one ever come at me with strong people alwys have many girls around them. Every strong ninja in Naruto has 1 wife. Was good until chap 54 even tho it was basically a training montage

Alright this is actually a decent fanfic. No system, no ludicrous wish fulfilment nonsense.

There are a few flaws though. The first is that you obviously do not proofread. The second is that your attention to standard writing rules is half assed : You do not start your sentences with capitals, you write numbers with symbols instead of letters.

Lastly, sometimes it gets a little too much with other’s reaction of the main character deeds. Many times I have found myself half sighing/cringing when I read Hiruzen thinking "how is he this good oh my god 🥵🥵". No. He is Hiruzen Sarutobi, he has seen Jounin level seven year-old before and all kind of prodigees through his decades of kagedom.

Get that fixed, and your story will level up in quality greatly. I wish you the best !

Love the story and thanks for updating so frequently

Also this is what I’m imagining the mc looks like when he gets older

I tried to read this book but it became too much for me this book isn’t even about mc himself.. that oc girl is like tail of the mc every single chapter you describe every move of the mc with her, like they went to sleep they trained together bla bla. There is no character development at all. not worth it

Logically, the novel is progressing in a manageable way for now. The only problem is that the girl next to the MC can somehow keep up with him. And the girl has no special lineage. It's uploaded almost every day. The average episode length is neither too short nor too long.

The work of this fic is nice and really good to read. As a suggestion, It would be awesome to have more interaction with the Rookie 9.

The MC is not edge lord and thank god it is not a system novel. Book is good. Atleast Give it a try before passing judgement. My first issue is pacing. The pacing is too fast paced and stabilized somewhere around 50 chapters. Hope author continues it that way otherwise it feels like watching a YouTube video on 4x speed. Second issue is main characters are training day in and day out. There is not enough break. From readers POV it would too overwhelming as they are productive every chapter posted. To offside it, show how MC and similar are interacting like going outside doing something entertaining etc. it kinda takes readers mind off but the transition should be organic. MC is becoming too OP too fast. Even without system cheats MC is becoming OP too fast. Better make the MC settle for sometime and make readers adjusted. Naruto is a story which takes more chapters to fully explore. So it is best if author takes it slow and explores more. Author specific:- If you are serious about writing this fic, Try to look in reddit sub threads for novels with high intense fight narration. It might help writing more flushed out fight scenes. Fight scenes are the bread and butter of Naruto fic. The story premise would be same for all the thousands of fics but if you want your fic to stand out you need to bring in more to the table. Overall it is 4 out of 5. Let me know about the criticism author if you have read the review.