Good start.. but how can a villain love... and how can a villain feel feelings to protect his family... the real villain, if he felt feelings towards someone, would kill them immediately to remove their weaknesses. Also, if we remove the #villain tag from the novel, how can he blame his mother after what her father did to them, to get pregnant with another child from him and accept this for herself... Also, the formation of the system is very bad, I have never seen an evil system this bad before... The novel started well, but the writer did not know how to complete it... I thank the writer for understanding his mistake and overlooking the completion of the novel... and I regret to myself that I wasted my time reading garbage
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I really loved this! It's so rare to find high-quality writing on WebNovel, and I devoured all 7 chapters. I love Eli so much; her personality is charming and endearing, and the story is surprisingly dark, which surprised me. There's some world-building happening at a nice measured pace, with an emphasis on character relations. Some of the writing in the last few chapters feels a little rushed compared to the brilliance of the first few chapters, but the author definitely has the capacity to produce a really high-quality story. Looking forward to see where the series goes! (Shipping Eli and Lara)
It is your typical trash story!!!10/10 plz give moar chapsIt is vrmmorpg so it automatically gets 4/5 stars and I haven’t noticed any large problems yet so 5/5
The writing quality is excellent, grammar is great, updates are rolling, and story development is awesome. The characters are cool but i'd like more description of what they look like and what their underlying motives are. The world-building is fantastic but I'd like more environmental description. This story hits just about every checkbox except I notice that the story is too often dialogue without anything else, so add that and this story will be elite.Feel free to look at my story "Avatar: Macai's Journey". Cheers
Good story Personally the story seems immature but itbis this immaturity which gives it its ‘uniqueness’Please dont decrease the wuality and please do not drop itI like the fact that the character development is based in arrogance cos it seems he has still not learnt from his brother’s advice(i kinda like the attitude he shows sometimes though)Wonderful story
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