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Good author... if your novel only had as a reason as a hobby of yours, then without a doubt I would be encouraging you with this peculiar system that you present, after all you don't see many novels with that kind of premise.
However, author..., when I saw you compete in the WSA 2022, then it is really questionable what theme you chose for your system, and not because it is a sin to write Simp stuff. If not to the type of audience that is going to be addressed, without further exaggeration, and many readers will not give your novel a chance, just because it has the title Simp.
Then, in chapters 1 and 8, it is more than enough for several readers to abandon the novel, and even I felt uncomfortable in chapter 8. The reason was the interaction of Jack and Mary, their thoughts and actions do not match, not they are grounded and feel compelled for a later plot to follow. Then if I have to guess later Mary will regret it and then Jack will slap him with a reality that no longer needs her ("Sigh, that theme is already more than reused by several authors"), and with that I'm not saying that I forgive her; however, the previously established relationship is a headache for many readers.
Now the question of characters we have a protagonist without self-esteem, with an inflated ego, Mary the typical naive heroine who later becomes the intriguing villain, Lucy the opportunistic girl, and in itself a large majority of readers will repudiate that type of background for your characters.
Well author with that being said, unfortunately your premise is already doomed, as long as you can win, I just know that it will take extraordinary effort to make the Simp system enjoyable to read.
Honestly, I wanted to rate this story 3 stars, but then I remembered that it's too early to give a review; however, I felt the need to write this, so in the form of support I decided to leave it 3.6, now I recommend reading it, well if you are a tolerant and calm person you may give it a try, but if you lack those two, then no, because you will take a bitter experience in these early chapters.
As soon as all this is said, it's my personal opinion and if I'm wrong, just let me know in the answers section, I don't mean to offend anyone and all that, and good luck author with the competition.
the characters are goodly written plot is very good, I am all for it.
just don't drop the story it will make me angry and disappointed.
also why do you have the same story uploaded three times?
good luck
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However, author..., when I saw you compete in the WSA 2022, then it is really questionable what theme you chose for your system, and not because it is a sin to write Simp stuff. If not to the type of audience that is going to be addressed, without further exaggeration, and many readers will not give your novel a chance, just because it has the title Simp.
Then, in chapters 1 and 8, it is more than enough for several readers to abandon the novel, and even I felt uncomfortable in chapter 8. The reason was the interaction of Jack and Mary, their thoughts and actions do not match, not they are grounded and feel compelled for a later plot to follow. Then if I have to guess later Mary will regret it and then Jack will slap him with a reality that no longer needs her ("Sigh, that theme is already more than reused by several authors"), and with that I'm not saying that I forgive her; however, the previously established relationship is a headache for many readers.
Now the question of characters we have a protagonist without self-esteem, with an inflated ego, Mary the typical naive heroine who later becomes the intriguing villain, Lucy the opportunistic girl, and in itself a large majority of readers will repudiate that type of background for your characters.
Well author with that being said, unfortunately your premise is already doomed, as long as you can win, I just know that it will take extraordinary effort to make the Simp system enjoyable to read.
Honestly, I wanted to rate this story 3 stars, but then I remembered that it's too early to give a review; however, I felt the need to write this, so in the form of support I decided to leave it 3.6, now I recommend reading it, well if you are a tolerant and calm person you may give it a try, but if you lack those two, then no, because you will take a bitter experience in these early chapters.
As soon as all this is said, it's my personal opinion and if I'm wrong, just let me know in the answers section, I don't mean to offend anyone and all that, and good luck author with the competition.
just don't drop the story it will make me angry and disappointed.
also why do you have the same story uploaded three times?
good luck
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