My Otherworldly Harem

we're strangers."

Hi it's me, your narrator. It would be a solid book if you actually read your draft twice. Before I criticise you, I want to say that the book would be good if you had a editor.First, there are no periods. Second, some words are not fully formed, and some sentences don't have commas where their are supposed to be. Third, it literally says, chapter one of chapter one.I literally can't read it without cringing.

Extremely enjoyable the only floor is the update which are kind of random amazing world building and character development overall one of my favourite books and would recommend

The writing of the story created without grammary or writing errors in a quite pure english has a planning and aliengned context of events the displaying of MC and sub-charachters Too, Altought the style of story developpement show that you are just an amateur Author but as noob authour is a respected work to write just continue