Ofcourse my mom wouldn't mind that I would take some of that with me, but I just didn't wanted to take everything. I took the blue and white Christmas balls with me and that was it, the rest I had to buy so that is what I'm going to do today.
8 years have been passed and now Jo has entered in her high school. At this stage of life youth feel some changes in their behaviour and surroundings. The perspective of seeing the life change at this age and most of adults gets attracted towards their opposite sex. Some says it love and some just attract for boink boink. Jo who was in her adult age also feeling also some changes in herself. Emotions had started rising in her heart but she was unaware of these changes. A new semester of her high school has been started and newcomer were getting admission in the school. Jing Shi who caught the attraction of Jo also got admission in her class but he was in different stream. Jo was living simply as she used to live earlier not talking to anyone specially to boys and used to study all the time. One day Jo was standing in the bus and the bus was moving towards its destination(school) suddenly the bus stop. Everyone was getting late so it caught everyone's attraction for whom the bus has been stopped. Jo peaked through the window of bus and saw a boy of her same age was running towards the bus. He was wearing yellow t-shirt and white trousers and his hair were waving in the air. His was having a little smile on his face and his eyes were sparkling because of sun's rays were falling on his face an . He seems to be a simple ordinary boy but when Jo saw him she was unable to remove her gaze from him. It was not less than a movie scene. She fall in love with him in her first sight but Jing Shi was unaware of her. When he got into the bus she saw him talking to one of her friend Annie Liang. She got so excited seeing him talking to her friend. Annie Lang and Jing Shi both were in the same stream so they knew each other from last few days. It has been about one week when Annie got in the school and Jo and Annie used to take bus from the same stop. So that's why Jo knew to Annie. Annie was sitting on her seat and Jiang was talking to her. They both were at the middle in the bus and Jo was standing three seats behind them. She was frozed when she saw Jiang standing before him. She was thinking in her mind how Annie knew him and what his name is. When they will reach to school and she'll ask about him from Annie. But her curiosity not let her wait. Then a moment come when Huang move a few steps forward then seeing Jiang's attentions towards somewhere she takes advantage of it and went to Annie. So asked his name then Annie told her that his name is Jiang Shi and his in the same stream with Annie and he live nearby her house. After hearing about him Jo went back where she was standing and often saw him. She was happy in her heart after knowing about him.
Ok so I'm making this review of your novel all because I've been curious as to what it was like, first of all your grammar it's not bad but its also not great for example in some lines where you should be using past tense words you use their present tense, and the way your wrote his "system" was too long, and to be fair I was like that too when I first started writing you can correct that by breaking down his system instead of putting everything all at once, that's all tbh I made this cuz of your review on my novel a couple days ago and to be honest with you there's nothing wrong with my English and my novel isn't that bad, I just came back to writing after a whole year of taking a break so...
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