I'm currently only ten chapters in, but I've already noticed some patterns that could be improved, especially in terms of writing quality. The big one for me is heavy use of passive voice eg: this character did instead of character said... Using a lot of existance verbs: did, was, is, will. I know the author isn't a native English speaker (I think) and this is a bit more nuanced then general English, but if he cut this out then his writing could be much better.This story isn't particularly unique, but it is still captivating and I'm enjoying it quite a lot. The main character is super generic, but it's still fun to read. A few of the author notes acknowledge his silly ideas and generic plot points, and to paraphrase him- what does it matter as long as it's awesome. I like this philosophy, and feel like this goes against the grain of other authors on this site who get mired down trying to explain away why their ideas aren't stupid.This authors strength lies in the fact that he gives enough detail to feel emersed and not so much that you stop feeling emersed. This author clearly has room for improvement but is definitely worth the read.
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