The story's world-building is good, the grammar is acceptable since it's not the author's first language and I imagine this story has good potential as the author is definitely dedicated.
Some words during descriptions being repeated a little too often, e.g.; Was in the capital of the New World Order. The capital of the New World Order was called New Hope in honor of the New World Order...
One paragraph had the descriptor mentioned 6 times.
Mix up the sentences a little, maybe shrink it and it would be great. :]
The story is interesting but a lot of information to digest in the early chapters. Looking forward to more!
It's looking good so far, and while the author's first language is not English they are doing quite well. This has plenty of potential with the first three chapters at the time of this review, looking forward to more.
If youre the type that likes reading VR related stories then try this out. There are some errors in grammars but it is still understandable. Also the Author's native language is not english.
The story itself is original. Having no binding class will let characters choose what's really useful or what they want to play.
Currently I have got to try new books in difderent kind of genres which I had never tried before. Yours also in that group. Yet, when I was trying out this I realised that soon I will get iterrsted in this genre too.. Thanks to you author, I am saying. Actually, honestly saying my opinion. In love with this. Hope to continue since it's a new experience for me. So for now, I am telling you author please keep going.. I will recommend this to my frieds, so they could read this too. Keep going author. This work should be continue for the sake of us. ❤️❤️❤️
Although it's my first time reading a book in this genre, I must say you portrayed all descriptions accurately. The world background, the game description and inside the game everything seems real. Nice work author. Keep up the good work.
The concept of the story is good...I like the world-building and feature description of the game.....the characters are intriguing and I'm curious how they developed their abilities....
keep it up.
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One paragraph had the descriptor mentioned 6 times.
Mix up the sentences a little, maybe shrink it and it would be great. :]
The story is interesting but a lot of information to digest in the early chapters. Looking forward to more!
The story itself is original. Having no binding class will let characters choose what's really useful or what they want to play.
keep it up.